Goldenray

[Goldenpaw]

Okay, here's my main-character-dude:

Your Username: Goldenpaw

Name: Goldenray
Clan: ThunderClan
Occupation: warrior (rawr!)

Appearance: A long furred yellowish golden furred cat with amber eyes.
Personality: Goldenray is probably as loyal as loyal gets when it comes to the warrior code, sometimes he can be too loyal. Loyalty has become an obsession for the young cat, sometimes it prohibits him from truly enjoying clan-life. Due to his unwavering loyalty to the warrior code, he would let a cat die if they broke the code and found them-self in a deadly situation.
He can also be somewhat power-hungry, his point of view on his leader always seems to be cynical, Goldenray claims to be the answer to all of the forest's problems.
Past: Goldenpaw was raised by his uncle, Keith, and lived in a small abandoned fox-hole until he was six moons old. One morning Goldenpaw found his uncle dying from a fall off of a tall pine tree. Keith's death wish was for Goldenpaw to seek out a deciduous forest and live there. Once the young cat arrived, he found ThunderClan and was instantly amazed by StarClan and the warrior code.


Is this good enough?? How many more characters can I make rightnow at this very moment? Does Goldenray haveto start out as a kit?? Can he start out as an apprentice and have Nettleclaw mentor him??

[VANESSA]

First - it's ThunderClan, not Thunder-clan. (:

And Goldenpaw needs one more flaw in his personality.
Since this site starts at the beginning of the Clans, he can't be pure ThunderClan. He must be originated from loners or rouges. If you want him to be born into ThunderClan, though, you would hve to make him start as a newborn kit or else the timeline wouldn't make sense.

Right now we're pretty slack, so you can even create one more character as long as you stay active.
You can even start as a warrior if you want (: and yes, Nettleclaw can mentor him since he's one if my characters.

[Goldenpaw]

Okay I edited it. The flaws I added are that he will let other cats die for the sake of the law, he is somewhat power hungry, and he is too serious to have fun.

Is that good enough??

[VANESSA]

It's good on the whole, but word it more formally like the other bios that were accepted. (:
Once you're done, I'll accept this.

[Goldenpaw]

Okay, is that better? :3

[VANESSA]

Yup, accepted! This topic will be moved to the Accepted Bios section and I'll add Goldenpaw to the list of ThunderClan cats. You could also start on a new character if you wish, we obviously need more (: